yeah...I wanna see nade launchers come into play,or at least a seige cannon

idk siege cannpns would be nice but a little bit of over kill.
i say stick with weapons that the marines can carry, maybe if they found one deployed then it might work but otherwise i say no siege

As to the Fade's disappearance, I think that there's some marine in the Behemoth who happened to hit a hive or something.

-after the fade goes away-

*SOMEWHERE ELSE ON THE BEHEMOTH!* (I feel like an announcer now!)

unknown marine:Wow,I'm supprised!not a single kaharra has shown up sense I've started drop-kicking the hive that's too high up to just jump and knife,and too far out to knife an hour ago.
-the view fades black-
unknown marine:hey,whats with all those yellow eyes...AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH--...
-the view unfades black to reveal a bunch of gorges,all with heal spray on their "lips" and a fade comeing through the door-

lolz chubi. anywayz, fire eel, i have one suggestion. introduce OCs and other types of chambers into t your story. and since the BH has been infested for so long, surely they wld have gotten 3 hives. rite? unless they have no RTs which i absolutely refuse to beieve.

-the before math of the hive killing incident,with the unknown marine a.k.a. Bob,cannon fodder,Jace.-

*We fade back to see bob on his trip to the hive.Luckly all the gorges,at the time,were too drunk from health spray to respond to the "your building is under attack" message and many skulks,fades,onos',and lerks were too far away to hear it.*

Bob:I may have no more ammo for my pistols =bob flashes his golden plated duel desert eagles and his gold tooth= and no ammo for my mac 10s. =see above comment replaceing golden plated duel desert eagles with golden plated duel mac 10s= and I can completely kick the shat outta these un-responding OCs,DCs,SCs,and MCs.=bob kicks the near dead DC a few more times before pulling out a golden plated butterfly knife and chopping it up.And flashing his golden tooth=

4e) Rest & Rations

“Reza!” Mike said loudly and did a salute.

Burt smiled, he had expected to see Reza return.

“You are back!” Jack cried. “With guns and supplies too!”
“Good to see you again guys, Sophie and Burt still alright?” Reza smiled, but he did not return the salute.
“Right…” Burt murmured weakly. “Our med packs?”
“Here, plenty of them. I ‘ve got us some big guns too. Three HMGs and two shotguns with spare ammo. There are also MRE biscuits and water with me.” Reza declared as he handed the items around. “First is you Burt. Lie down, I will do the rest.”

Reza activated a med pack and immediately, it begun releasing micro nano-machines into the air, which Burt inhaled through his mouth and nose. Once in his body, the nano-machines went to work, repairing Burt's damaged cells, fixing his raptured blood vessels, replacing his lost blood. The nanos flooded his system, replacing lost body fluid, patching up his shattered ribs and forming healthy calcium. At last, they finally ran out of energy and faded into Burt's blood stream as nutrients for him to absorb.

Minutes later, Burt was healed almost completely, his energy was restored and his body functioning like usual again, he stood up and stretched his arms as if nothing had happened earlier. He patted his chest heartily; the pain was completely gone. The med pack had done well in repairing his broken ribs.

“Amazing…” Jack exclaimed. “It worked so fast…”
Reza narrowed his eyebrows. “This is what’s been keeping our forces alive for so long. God bless the man who invented the med pack.”
“May I…have one too?” Jack asked.
“No. The next one is for Sophie.” Reza said simply.

It was Sophie’s turn, and as she lay unconscious on the bed, Reza activated the med pack beside her face. The nanos automatically entered her body, and did the same task of healing her. Regardless of the type of wound, the med pack fixed her up as effectively as it did for Burt and replaced her lost blood.

Sophie woke up abruptly and glanced at everyone with surprised and sleepy eyes like a girl who woke up from a long sleep.

“What happened?” She asked.
“You lost too much blood and fainted.” Mike explained. “So Reza got some med packs and healed you. Look at your hand.”

Sophie stared at her right hand. The skin surface was smooth and flawless. The wound from before was completely gone, not even the slightest scar remained, it was as if she never was hurt at all.

“Thank you, Reza!” Sophie said loudly as she stood up and did a salute.
“You are welcome, and don’t bother with the salute.” Reza said gently with a grin.

Reza held the last med pack with uncertainty for a while, and finally he looked at Mike.

“Your turn.” Reza said.
“But Reza,” Mike protested. “Your face…”
“Oh, don’t worry about that, I will be fine. Your shoulder needs to be patched up.” Reza said while scratching dried blood off his face.
“My shoulder’s already healed. You need that med pack more than I do.” Mike argued.

Mike flexed his shoulder and flinched; the pain was getting more intense than before.

“See?” Reza pointed out. “Go ahead and use it.”

Mike nodded his head reluctantly. Reza activated the med pack, and Mike breathed in the nanos. They entered his blood stream and begun to repair his injured shoulder, patching up the damaged tissues and torn muscles, as well as supplying calcium into his bones. A minute later, Mike stretched and rubbed his shoulder; it felt much better than before. Reza secretly thanked the inventor of the med pack, without it, countless marines would have died, and a lot of money and resource would have been wasted. His knuckle had now begun to hurt, and had swollen up, but he had no intention of letting his marines know.

“By the way Reza, how did you get that scratch in the first place?” Jack asked.
“From a Fade.” Reza said simply.
“A Fade? You encountered one of those and survived? You killed it?” Sophie asked unbelievably.
“Actually I didn’t. I almost got killed by it,” Reza lowered his head as if in deep thoughts. “But it spared me, even though it had a chance to kill me.”
“It spared you? What do you mean?” Jack asked.
“I don’t really know…it stopped attacking suddenly and just blinked away.” Reza answered.
“Well, maybe it thought you were too much of a challenge?” Jack suggested.
Reza shook his head. “Unlikely. It had a clear chance of winning.”
“What if it was called back? Other Kharaa may have asked it to get to other areas for certain reasons.” Mike said.
Reza nodded his head thoughtfully. “Telepathy perhaps.”

While man have advanced in technology, and their means of communication have progressed to a point where people could talk across planets, there was still an ability which they hope for but can never attain – Telepathy. The Kharaa have this ability, and it is telepathy that makes them so efficient and deadly. While they can make sign languages or communicate vocally using grunts, snarls, hisses or a wide variety of other noises, the one communicating ability all Kharaa share in common regardless of species is telepathy.

This is another one of the mysterious aspect of the Kharaa. Scientists only managed to find out about this amazing ability through several rare captured Skulks. The Skulks were originally placed individually in several armored cells for study, and were constantly monitored by hidden cameras. However, the Skulks were observed to move in a same pattern, and even attacked the hidden cameras all in exactly same time. Scientists were then puzzled and surprised by this remarkable behavior, as the Skulks emitted the same kind of noises, and moved the same way in the same time. The cells were soundproof, and located too far away from one another for the Skulks to have communicated using means of vocal or sight. As scientists observed thermal images scans of the cells however, it was realized that before the Skulks made the same kind of movement, there was a heightened heat spike in their brains. This was the first discovery of the Kharaa’s ability to communicate with telepathy. Multiple encounters with them in the battlefield further provided evidences of telepathy between the various forms of Kharaa. Ultimately though, before any more information could be extracted, the captured Skulks killed themselves by smashing their heads repeatedly into the walls – all at the exact same time as well.

At last, everyone’s energy was refilled, they drank a bottle of water each and ate as much MREs as they could consume. They carried a bottle of water and a packet of MRE biscuit each. Meanwhile, as everyone were reading and memorizing the map, Reza distributed the guns and respective ammo around. He, Burt and Jack handled the HMGs, while Sophie and Mike used the shotguns. Everyone however, kept their pistols and left their LMGs behind.

“Jack.” Reza instructed as he passed a HMG to an eager Jack. “This is a Heavy Machine Gun, a weapon far more powerful and dangerous than your old LMG. Use it well.”
Jack nodded his head in acknowledgement. “Yes Reza.”
“You guys ready to kick some Kharaa arse? We are going to the lift right now!” Reza asked loudly.

Everyone there nodded. Reza smiled as he led the way, his HMG raised proudly.

“Sophie.” Jack asked suddenly.
Sophie turned her head to face him. “Yes?”
“You still alright?” He asked concernedly.
Sophie smiled. “Yeah, I 'm fine, thanks”
“About the injury on your hand......” Jack said.
“This?” Sophie raised her hand. “Oh well, thanks to the med pack, I won't have an ugly scar over my hand.”
Jack lowered his head. “About what happened just now……I am sorry”
“Sorry? What are you talking about?” Sophie asked, genuinely confused.
“No….I mean lying to you and Mike, I truly is…..” Jack stammered.
“It’s alright Jack. That no longer matters now.” Sophie said as she smiled gently.
“Thanks. Are you scared at all?” Jack asked.
Sophie narrowed her eyes. “Scared? Why should I be scared?”
“Good for you.......” Jack said softly.
“Are you scared of something?” Sophie questioned eagerly.
“Only one thing, the giant Onos – Onii.” Jack replied.
Sophie lowered her head. “So am I........”
“Sophie, do not worry.” Jack assured her. “Because I – We are with you.”
“I know, from now on, we will all have to stick together and – ” Jack said.

“Heads up!” Reza alerted everyone.

They were coming around to a corner. Sloshing sounds could be heard, along with a constant bubbling noise. Reza held a finger to his lip in a keep-quiet signal, he then did a wait-here signal with his palm and cautiously took a quick peek from his position.

“Oh crap!” Reza uttered under his breath in frustration.

Under the dim light, from almost twenty metres away, Reza could vaguely make out the shape of a fat Gorge, a towering Resource Chamber and a deadly Offensive Chamber.

Thanks for the overwheming response!

Many of u ppl sure have a great sense of imagination. Whatever it is, do know that the basics of my story is already established. I just have to add content, detail and correct all mistakes.

WOOT OC's are making a entrance finally.
i was always under the impression that med packs were "plugged" into the marine, like the jetpacks and heavy armor.

the story is really advancing well and minus a few gramatical errors its pretty frickin AWESOME

LOL, I bet Reza is regretting not taking those Nade Launchers. Although having the right weapon for each situation would kill the story and suspense.

I hope their able to set up a base. Then we can have a ns_Seige007 situation with all the lead flying everywhere!

In-game, all it takes is left and right strafing and constant firing to kill an OC, but I see the trend of "deadly" OCs in fanfics. I like it though; it adds an obstacle.

Ugh, not siege007.... nice fanfic work though, keep it up!

finally, some OCs and structures. Nice work anywayz, as usual. i cant find any fault with this one. Good work portraying Mike and Reza as selfless characters. makes me respect them more. i also feel something going on between jack and sophie.

i do not want them to set up siege turrets, i view them as the cheap way to end the game and is alway's used by commanders who are not up for a challenge of taking a hive down manually, personnally ill take a Jp and knifes any day of the week for a hive take down

and you think JP's are any better...WELDER RUSH IN HEAVY ARMOR!

Yeah,why haven't we seen heavy armor or welders.I wanna see 2-3 more marines kill the OC and resource chamber with welders,and toss the gorge in a washing machine

at least people have to work with JP's and then they just knife the hive. im not talkin the cheap little stand on top and knife stuff either

dont give them any JP or HA. too easy means not intereting. fighting against tough aliens would make the story more interesting

btw, where did the onii go?

That's the whole point.We don't know where he is.He could be that gorge.Maybe he morphed back into a gorge ------

dont u just hate that when ur a onos on a CO map and are saving ur res for like focus or something and then u have to go gorge cause the uber 1337 marines have taken ur hive down to five % health and ur team is to nub to have their own res so u have to de-evolve to gorge to save their behinds. not ot mention i thought that this thing was like super onos, what if it cant evolve

Sorry guys, no new chapters for now. My comp crashed, all my chapters r gone. Still trying hard to get 'em back...

Where did the Onii go? He's gone looking for prey. Afterall, he's too big to take standard lifts or climb ladders and chase after our beloved marines.

wah. thats sad. losing all your work. does that include the future chapters of BH? i feel your pain. my computer hanged halfway when i was writin my fan fic and i didnt save. took me hald a day to rewrite.

im starting to have withdrawls. NEED MORE BH

Save often

i think hes talking about hes memory was wiped. not that he forgot to save and his comp restarted. id hope that he was smarter than that

Meh,I've had worse.Remember the old thing about the kid finishes his term paper and trys to save it only to discover microsoft sucks and it refuses to save and his right mouse button is broken from clicking so he can't copy and paste...yeah...Had the same shat happen to me...the menu button on my keyboard has coke IN it that day...

Also,Try typeing something on an electronic typewriter and haveing it go hay wire and start typeing random shat on ya paper...It's espically bad when it can go up/down a line by itself

40 pound Hydrolic Typrwriters FTW!

Hold on,we're almost past the monster thread post wise...KEEP POSTING...

Need MORe Behemoth......having siezures.......cant stand it..........

and about onii going to find prey, wouldnt there only be aliens on the BH other than the marines that the story is about?

yeah,but these might not be the only survivors.They say it takes quite some time to get from 1 side of BH to another.The war might still be going on somewhere on the other side of the ship.

i seriously doubt if there are any other survivors still fighting on the other side of the ship. i mean, the BH has been gone for months. can any1 survive that long? especially with the onii around.

and in regards to what the onii eats, well, u have to wait until after the story ends before fire eel can release that info. its a shocker

IT EATS OTHER ALIENS!nah,jokeing

onii eats radioactive material and humans are considered a snack for it

just read through i like it and ooops the time has gone

Another chapter plz u gotta its addictive i usually dont read stories but i like these

yeah,just improvise if nessary

wow... lol.... im speechless

This is a pretty damn good story. Only one problem... where's the rest? lol

Im gonna cry if another chapter don't come soon

hey guys. fire eel told me that his computer is down and the current one he is using has no mocrosoft word so u will all have to wait till his comp is fixed. in the meantime.... u can read my story

Ive read your story 3 times lol and this story up untill now about 3 times aswell lol

keep them coming they cure my boredness in work

Whered the story go? THis thread has become empty (watches a tumbleweed roll by)
I hope Fire eel gets another chapter back up before the audience leaves...

4f) Kharaa Structures

“What is it, Reza?” Burt asked, concerned that something troublesome was up ahead.
“We have arrived at a resource nozzel. And it is already been occupied by a damn Gorge, a Resource Chamber, and an Offense Chamber.” Reza replied, carassing his HMG.

Reza peered again. It was a L-Shaped junction, with the lift and Resource Chamber at the very end while the Gorge and Offense Chamber were positioned somewhere near the middle.

The Offense Chamber was a deadly foe nearly as tall as a human. It was a biological structure, seemingly dead but very much alive; just like a plant. It was not capable of moving much but very much capable of killing a human. It had a large blood-red round head like a pincushion of deadly spikes, and was pillared on a thick meaty stem with several metre-long curved spikes at the end as well. This was among the most basic of all Kharaa bio structures, and also one of the most troublesome of all to deal with.

Meanwhile, the Resource Chamber was also a bio structure like the Offense Chamber. It wasn't as deadly, but was no less uglier. It had an enormous oversized head with no eyes, nose or true mouth, but was able to make low unintelligent sounds occasionally. It had two short stubby arms, and grew to more than two metres tall, making it a huge and vulnerable target. There were rumours of Resource Chambers grabbing and attacking humans with its arms, but there have been no truely accurate reports of such a thing happening. However, it was vital that Resource Chambers were taken down as quickly as possible, as they provide resource to other Kharaas.

Resources nozzels like this were very common on spaceships, and especially abundant on one as big as The Behemoth. A resource nozzel is the only safe and reliable way to tap into the incredible amount of nano reserves stored on a spaceship. It comes in the form of the useless nano sludge, but can instantly change into useful nanites to be used if harvested, tapped and purified by a Resource Tower. Unfortunately, the Kharaa have found a way to use the nano sludge as well, using their repulsive Resource Chamber to suck up and absorb the nano sludge, and distrubuting the converted nano as resources to be used by the other Kharaa species. In short, the Kharaa used a resource nozzle almost like the Frontiersmen do.

“No other ways?” Jack asked. “Except through here?”
“No other ways. We got to take them out and proceed on.” Reza answered and did a hand signal for cover-me.
“Why can't we just throw a damn grenade at them or something?” Jack questioned.
“Do you want the entire spaceship of Kharaa to come to us? A H-Grenade attracts way too much attention.” Burt reprimanded Jack as he got into position.

Reza took another quick peep, the Gorge did not move from its position at all. It was nothing but a hideously fat pig-like creature which resembled a sack on fours. It's mouth was shaped like a Skulk's, but it lacked the sharp teeth, and instead, had a weird insect-like mantibite sticking out where it's tongue should be. Through this mantibite, a Gorge attacks with deadly acidic spit, or builds other bio structures. Even so however, these were among the weakest Kharaa, and never meant for frontline combat. They are usually found hiding behind the other species of Kharaa, and healing them and serving as a support.

Reza smiled, this would be good. First thing to do would be to kill the Gorge.

He pointed to Jack and instructed him, “Jack, this is your chance to prove yourself. I want you to take a quick peep at the Gorge and his two foul creations.”
Jack swallowed his breath. “But for what?”
“You are my backup. I want you to understand the situation before you go rushing in like a bloody idiot.” Reza remarked.
“Ye-Yes, Reza!” Jack replied.

Nervous and frightened, Jack decided to take a peep just like Reza. Unfortunately, inexperience along with fear made Jack lean out a little too far, far enough for the Offense Chamber to sense his presense. Immediately, the man-height bio structure got ready its spikes and its head began to swelled up and turned even redder.

At this point in time, Reza heard the unmistakable low-pitch shrill, the indication that the Offense Chamber was readying its deadly spikes. Without any warning, he grabbed Jack and yanked him back. A spike which travelled faster than the eye could see, whizzed past Jack's cheek.

The deadly eight-inch spike was now imbedded deeply into the wall beside them while Jack simply stared with his mouth agap. A neat line of blood trickled down a slight cut on his face. If Reza had not pulled Jack away in the nick of time, he would have been impaled with the spike through his head.

“Do you know how close you were to certain death?!” Reza rebuked Jack as he took another peek, fearing that the Gorge had been aware of their presense.

Amazingly, the Gorge had not move from its position at all! A second of thinking and Reza realised that the Gorge was asleep. What sheer stroke of good luck for us at last, Reza thought gladly.

“Stand back.” Reza instructed. “Get ready to back me up if you see fit, and I don't mean you Jack. I mean the others. Watch and learn.”
“Roger that Reza.” Mike said and he held up his Shotgun.
“We are right behind you.” Burt added.
Sophie spun around. “I will guard our butts against potential sniffy Skulks.”

Jack could say nothing but watch in awe at their teamwork and cooperation.

Counting '1,2,3' under his breath, Reza sprunged out with his HMG and fired at the Gorge first. He had to kill it first or risked it escaping and warning the other Kharaa.

The Gorge squeaked in pain as it aruptly woke up and died. Meanwhile, the Offense Chamber unleashed a volley of dart-like spikes at Reza.

He dodged to the right, and then to the left; but a spike brushed past his shoulder, causing him to flinch in pain and lose his momentum.

“Reza! We are with you!” Mike cried as he charged out with Burt and they fired at the Offense Chamber in unison. There was a brief exchange of spikes and bullets. The Offense Chamber stayed rooted, unable to escape the bullets while the three of them evaded the spikes by darting left and right. Rounds after rounds tore into the thick meaty stem of the Offense Chamber and it suddenly stopped shooting and dooped downwards like a withered flower.

The Gorge now laid on its belly in a pool of greenish-yellowish blood with several holes in its back while the Offense Chamber now seemed to shrunken up as blood begun pouring profusely out of the many holes on its body. A dozen spikes stuck deep in the wall behind them as testimonial to their deadly battle. Reza examined his shoulder.

“How is it Reza?” Sophie asked in concern.
“Nah, nothing serious.” He said with a confident smile.

Finally, with a loud splat, the Offense Chamber exploded and its blood and chunks of remains begun splattering everywhere, raining down on Jack who was well ahead and ready to finish off the helpless Resource Chamber.

Jack cried out in surprise as he was covered in the disgusting Kharaa blood, much to the amusment of the others. Jack raised his HMG and aimed at the head of the Resource Chamber. Sensing danger, it turned around to face Jack. Making miserable 'murk murk' cries, the Resource Chamber raised its arms to protect itself. However, its weak and pathetic defense could do little against the piercing rounds of the HMG as the bullets penetrated deep into the Resource Chamber's flesh.

The Resource Chamber begun to quiver and shake as it soon swelled up and exploded into a rain of blood and flesh. This time however, Jack was well out of the way.

“Look!” Jack shouted, pointing forward excitedly. “The lift is right ahead!”

A disappointingly short chapter unfortunately. I had to write this at a friend's house, and without the help of my microsoft word.

Sigh........Sorry guys, my comp is really screwed up right now. I hardly get the internet anymore, let alone write my story.

Nonetheless, whenever I go my friend's hse or something, I will try to write a chapter, and hopefully, the next chapter will be longer.

I am so happy that so many ppl still like my story, makes me so touched, lolz. Seriously, as long as you guys are here to read it, I will be here to write it, even if I can't use my comp anymore.

THANK GOD YOU ARE BACK!

anywayz, nice chapter and i didnt find it short. it was very descriptive, which is good. but i think you made the OC oversized. if it was the same height as a human, the marins would not be able to jump over it, like the would be able to in-game. action was fast and intense. about the RT, i think you give it much more intelligence than it actually has.

as usual, jack newbified himself again.

and the was definately AFK.

Its not that disappointing i found it quite amusing how the gorgie is lazy enough to go sleep on the job lol keep them coming

Oh yeah, incase no one realised it. I renamed the alien Resource Tower as Resource Chamber. Ingame, it is still named RT, but in my fanfic, I need to show a difference in their names.

Lolz, I often go afk while I wait for my Gorgie to get some res as well.