I need to learn how to become a better mapper, so here is my first(and best so far) try at a HLDM map. This is not a NS or combat map.
Critique or criticism wanted.
http://www.angelfire.com/games5/align0/lollerballer.rar

In order to make this post useful as well:
Yeah saney, but this is the only forum apart from the steam forums(and, well, you know the people there...) which I know good enough. And Im hardly good enough to get it put up on any of the official sites yet.

No offense, but this is the NS mapping forum. For all-round HL mapping, I'd suggest you try The Snarkpit or the VERC Collective.